Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

In the contemporary era, where
people
can afford to live wherever they want without any borders matter, some are still afraid of leaving their comfort zone for logical reasons.
However
, there are pros and cons of
such
a way of thinking, and in
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underlying factors will be focused on two main areas. Perhaps,
one
of the causes of the affair to explore opportunities to live somewhere else is that circumstances nowadays are not stable, meaning that taking risks
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not always ends
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. To illustrate, the famous influencer Aliya Baitugayeva counts as rolling in the money here in Kazakhstan, she loves to travel, but she
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to leave overseas or even another city, due to unknown would be level of living abroad be the same as here.
This
pattern appears to be global, with the result that the immigration level of wealthy
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is very low.
Moreover
, another issue is the mentalities barrier, where
person
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from
one
region is not understood by other region
people
.
For instance
, the population of South Kazakhstan appreciate those who are from the West, due to the reason that despite the same nation “Kazakh”, traditions and even language is different, especially the manners.
That is
why most of the
people
from both sides do not really desire to change their location. Regarding potential advantages, probably the obvious
one
would be a great knowledge of the city. To be more precise, the person who lived in the area whole his life knows every corner of it, the best view-point, the delicious café or shop with marvellous discounts.
In contrast
, the disability to try or visit something new might bore human beings, and it will result in depression and anxiety.
Furthermore
, another possible privilege may be tight bonds with family and
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relatives. Where help from aunt to look after a child will be for free and pleasant rather than spending budget on professional nanny with the treat of her attitude towards the infant.
However
, if the person prefers introverted life, where she enjoys her private territory, annoying relatives could be a big disaster to it, and the only
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way to get rid of it is to move to another city or even country. To conclude, it is evident that there are a lot of
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reasons why the vast majority of
people
choose to not go out of their comfort zones,
such
as confidence in the future and cosy surroundings, and all the positives and negatives of that choice are well known by those
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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