Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays some people believe that some subjects in school like
history
plays
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role in students lives,
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the other hand, some individuals have different ideas, they say in
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modern life pupils need to learn scientific knowledge and tey rather than
history
.Well,in the following essay, I will discuss both viewpoints. Unequivocally,
history
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great influence on our lives.To cue evidence, humans and students who live and study in today's world should learn numerous things from the mistakes that our past generation made, what they did or thought, their beliefs and etc.If our young generation
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these things in educational institutions,we can have hope for their
future
and
also
the
future
of our dear planet, earth. In reverse, they are some people who have completely different ideas,they declared that
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from the past or
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hisy
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we should just focus on
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and our young races must indoctrinate artificial intelligence, technology and etc.
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,if our students study these things they can even fix the errors that we had in the past.The subject that our young adults learn today,will determine our near
future
. To draw a conclusion,
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system
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different topics to teach from science to
history
.But in my opinion, our young descendants need both
history
and technology because these two complete each other.So,
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with all these subjects we can make
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future
and save our planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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