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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the olden days, most of the youngsters study their college studies in
the
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 native place.
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,in the present situation students have many opportunities to study in foreign
countries
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. In
this
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 essay, I will outline the positives and negatives of changing
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. On the one hand, it will have some benefits when young people educate and learn in the native
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,through studying in own place they are familiar with cultures and traditions because most public prefer to stay in
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country
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, most teenagers have obtained
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 by distance learning, while working and gained
theoritical
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theoretical
 and practical experience.
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,most folks are comfortable in attending classes where they
born
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 and brought up in a
country
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,they are used of the native's range of resources that are useful for students nowadays.
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providing materials from different colleges and universities for higher studies are
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 available domestically.
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, government and higher authorities are obtaining facilities
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accomodation
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accommodation
,food and shelter, for domestic and international students.
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,
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 generation
are
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 following ethical behaviour in perspective
countries
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, which is
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very important aspect in a working environment and helps in building character traits.
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,most folks are waiting to
migrant
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other
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 foreign
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 because to earn and settle down after completing
of
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graduation.
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,
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initially
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 men and women face some language problems in
english
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 speaking
countries
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,
aware
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 of
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a new
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 culture, change of food habits,making new friends can help them to live in a new
country
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,youth always want to experience other than home
country
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 education because of various opportunities they have when studying
in
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abroad.
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,
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pursueing
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pursuing
masters
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 degree after graduation to obtain
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 of learning, they will prepare different competitive exams and entrance tests to get immigration of foreign
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. In conclusion,
older
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 generation always
feel
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 that their children need to study in
home
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their home
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country
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 to obtain
degree
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a degree
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.
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,youth prefer to travel
other
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to other
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 international
countries
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 to get goodwill and status.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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