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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Folks claim that in the future, printed
newspapers
 or
books
 or magazines will become
absolete
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absolute
obsolete
 cause online reading materials are available for everyone, I firmly disagree with
this
 statement. Because there is a lot of reasons that prove
us
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we
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 publish
newspapers
 and magazines and
books
 will always have a place in our lives and not all online reading materials are free of charge.
To begin
 with, reading online
have
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has
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 excited
for
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me for
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 several years it is convenient to search subjects you want, but one important thing is ignored in fact, the majority of material that can be read in the online publication providers require monthly subscriptions.
This
 website and collect content and they have to pay salaries to them, so it could be expensive for websites and it
lead
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leads
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 to
for
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apply
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using online
books
 or
newspapers
people
 have to charge and it has a lot of
cost
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costs
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.
moreover
 reading on the screen would be harmful to the eyes and spinal cord, even though some so-called devices can protect against bad lights, they will not do it so well as
books
 do. Reading pointed
books
 and
newspapers
 is
memorable
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 experience. Printed
books
 will always be favoured by countless
people
 as they loved holding a book in their hands, smelling the papers and flipping through its pages. Some
people
also
 collect
books
 that they are obsessed with and store them in their beloved libraries. To conclude, despite online reading being popular with certain
people
, I believed that Printed
books
 and
newspapers
 will always have
their
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loyal fans who would never want to read online, even if it was free.
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