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Some people think that economy progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country's success. What are these factors? Which, of all factors,do you think are most important?

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 trying to do their
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's economic growth . Some opponents believe that successful business is the only path to measure a
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's achievement but other proponents argue that there are several
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 to decide a
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. In
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 essay , I will discuss both views in the following paragraphs and I will include my own opinion . On the one hand , some people believe that determining a nation's wealth is the only method to describe that particular
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's
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.There is no doubt that if the
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 is rich enough
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 , most European
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 have free
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 care and education system because their
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' incomes are high and perfect.Obviously,it would be difficult to maintain a successful business for a long time and it can stress both governments and residents.
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, Japan is famous for its long work hours and its work-life balance is extremely low were compared to other developed nations.
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 , the suicide rate in Japan is high and the government is
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 worried because it will be getting worst in the coming few years.
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 , other people are quick to point out the fact that a
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's
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 can be measured by many
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 like
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 and
happiness
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. Undoubtedly ,
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 and
happiness
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 are more important than money because we cannot buy those things . Some
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 measure their
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'
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 by
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 like Bhutan.
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 is poor and small economy but their life expectation and
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 can beat other developed nations. But we cannot refuse that wealth is
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 an important factor for a
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's
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.Without , the money we cannot fulfil our basic facilities like electricity and food . To conclude , money is one of the essential
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 to measure a
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success
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however
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 other
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 like
happiness
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 and
health
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 need to consider . In my humble opinion , we need to balance
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,wealth and
happiness
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 to decide where a particular
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's successful or not .
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