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|Advantages And Disadvantages Of Taking A Year Off Between High School And University

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 intervals between tertiary education and high school have both advantages and disadvantages.Here some cons and pros are explained in my essay.
Firstly
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, the
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 gap gains the child to acquire knowledge
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 is related to
further
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 studies especially those who are furious about their future.
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,some students are really passionate to become a doctor or an engineer and
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 able to crack those particular exams due to various reasons .So for
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 it is an opportunity to reach their particular goals by providing
an
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apply
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extra
time
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 to
focuse
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focus
 more clearly.Some may require just a period of
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change
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 something impossible to possible.
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, getting
break
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a break
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 is an essential part to boost our mental and physical health.
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,
by
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spending more
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 with family and attending
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a gathering
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gathering
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gatherings
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 with friends are helps teenagers to overcome their stress.
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, there are some disadvantages too,
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 a crucial period of
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 .So everyone is competing with each other to gain a better place.
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, unemployment
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 increasing day by day just because of students who pass out every year high in number.
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,
graduate
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graduates
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 with high marks
are
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sometime
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sometimes
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 not valuable as experience.So children taking
brakes
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breaks
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 could be held back.In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 some cons are there still we need to appreciate those who are willing to take some breaks ,just to take care of themselves.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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