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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is widely believed that it is better to accept uncomfortable situations
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 as an unsatisfactory
job
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 or shortage of
money
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, while others argue that it is beneficial to work harder to make these situations better. In my opinion, I agree with the latter view and will discuss both sides in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some
people
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 think that accepting a bad situation is always better.
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, there are many who are not pleased with their
job
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, but they have no option left.
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,
people
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 have to make a living and earn
money
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 to pay all bills for electricity, water, education fees.
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, if they chose to leave their
job
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, they will become unemployed and not be able to meet daily needs.
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, workers in factories must carry heavy things, which could affect their physical health in the future.
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, they must accept these serious issues because they need
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 to survive and grow up their children.
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,
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also
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 face problems related to
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. If they do not accept, they might get into debt. To illustrate
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,
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 who lack
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 could send their children to public schools
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 of private schools. Despite the aforementioned reasons, I believe that it is always beneficial to work harder and alleviate
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 situations.
Firstly
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, when someone feels tensed and stressed about their
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, they should try to get a
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 which is interesting in.
In addition
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, those with a shortage of
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 could put more hours into work,
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 as taking up part-time jobs, which would increase their income and mitigate
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 problems. To sum up, while some
people
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 think that
people
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 should accept a situation, no matter how bad it is, I contend with
people
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 should make more effort and come up with solutions to their problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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