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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative impact on children. To what extent do you agree?

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A popular opinion is that the coverage of
celebrities
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 in the
media
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 affects
children
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 in a negative way. From my point of view,
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 is a logical conclusion from the following observations. Social
media
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 is already used by young
children
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.
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, these young
children
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 were not educated in distrusting information seen on the internet. As result, they often take everything
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they see for granted.
Celebrities
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 promote an unrealistic
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lifestyle
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life
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lifestyle
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style
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,
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 or try to sell overpriced products. Having a different
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lifestyle
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life
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style
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 leaves the young humans to desire the unreachable.
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, they demand from their parents to buy the advertised products, and they become frustrated if they do not get them.
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 because of financial constraints. Traditional print
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 covers
celebrities
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, too, but the
style
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 is very different from social
media
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. Usually, pictures are taken of the
celebrities
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, and a story is constructed, exaggerating an event. Having
choosen
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chosen
 the wrong
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 for the clothes, or having gained some weight are the trivial reasons for
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 texts. As consequence, young
children
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 learn that it is normal to judge people based on
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 things. Of course, they
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 integrate
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 into their own social interaction. And
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,
celebrities
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 appear on TV,
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 in talk shows. Like on social
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, they are hyped because of their
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lifestyle
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life
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lifestyle
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style
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, or whatever news they have to tell. The main purpose of it is selling something, and
children
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 often fall for it. In summary, I think that a negative effect on
children
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 is caused by the
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 coverage of
celebrities
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. In order to support my point of view, I gave examples from social
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, traditional print
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 and TV which can result in influencing
children
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 in the wrong direction.
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