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In some cities and towns all over the world, traffic jams are a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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In today’s world,
traffic
 jam is an extremely difficult problem in large cities of the world.
This
 essay will explore some of the causes and recommended practices to reduce the issue. There are two major causes that lead
the
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 congestion on the increase in metropolitan areas.
Firstly
, the number of
cars
 accounts for a high percentage. Today, companies manufacture a large number of
cars
 and it is pretty easy for
people
.
Furthermore
, many families own two or three
cars
 which result in
the
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 increase
of
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traffic
jam
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. Another contributing factor is the lack of public transports.
Therefore
,
people
 use their own
cars
 even in rush hours. The
last
 cause is
road
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 system. Most of the streets in my city are narrow and few
cars
 can pass through them simultaneously. In order to
we
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reduce
traffic
, we should change our working habits.
Firstly
, the internet can now be used to connect
people
. More
people
 could work from home and meetings can be held as video conferences.
In addition
, workers could be given flexible timetables. Another solution would be to tax drivers.
Secondly
, workers should share their
cars
 and travel together. More
people
 use public transport to the city
center
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.
For example
, in London, there is a congestion charge.
This
 helps to raise money for better public transport. Public service needs to be reliable and efficient. In conclusion,
traffic
 congestion is a hot problem
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nowaday
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,
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people
 throughout the world.
Therefore
,
the
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society needs to actively propagate for each citizen to improve their responsibility. Because it makes every family always peaceful and happy.
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