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El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.

El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.
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The given diagrams illustrate what is the impact in normal
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condition
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conditions
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 and
EI
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Nino
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condition
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conditions
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 in the Pacific
Ocean
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.
EI
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Nino
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 means the warm
ocean
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, which
is affect
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affects
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 the weather
on
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in
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East
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the East
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 and
West
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 Pacific
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Ocean
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Oceans
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while
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Austrian
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 and
Peru
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.
Overall
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, the Pacific
Ocean
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 in normal
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condition
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conditions
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is balance
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is balanced
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 by cool and warm
water
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 and
wind blowing
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wind-blowing
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level
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levels
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 in the east and
west
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 direction.
EI
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Nino
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changing
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changes
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 the wind blowing level,
water
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 temperature and weather trend in
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Austrian
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Austria
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 and
Peru
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while
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 nutrients are reduced to cause the number of fish
decrease
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. In
a
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apply
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normal
condition
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, strong trade
winds
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blowing
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blow
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 in the east pacific to bring the cool
water
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 up
while
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 weak
winds
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 in the
west
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 pacific and
water
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 go westward. Nutrients are rich and create
the
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a
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 good environment for the fish and other life in
sea
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the sea
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. Storm clouds focus on
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west
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the west
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, which
bring
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brings
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 the rainy day in
Austrian
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 and green grow healthy.
On
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In
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opposite
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the opposite
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direction
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directions
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 –
Peru
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, there is enough sunshine and rich
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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ocean
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 life and
fishes
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fish
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.
EI
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Nino
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 effect, which caused the blowing level change,
west
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winds
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 are stronger than east
winds
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,
whereas
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 the warm
water
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 pushed eastwards
then
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 cool
water
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 at the bottom. Storm clouds move to
east
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the east
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 too
then
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weather
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the weather
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 pattern changed too.
Austrian
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 is more sunshine,
however
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 green is dead as less
of
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apply
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water
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.
Peru
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 is
raining
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rainy
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 and cloudy,
number
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the number
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 of fish is reduced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words condition, ei, nino, ocean, west, austrian, peru, water, winds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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