El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.

El Nino is the name of a warm ocean current that affects weather patterns on both sides of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino conditions.
The given diagrams illustrate what is the impact in normal
condition
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conditions
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and
EI
Nino
condition
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conditions
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in the Pacific
Ocean
.
EI
Nino
means the warm
ocean
, which
is affect
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affects
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the weather
on
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in
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East
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the East
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and
West
Pacific
Ocean
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Oceans
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while
Austrian
and
Peru
.
Overall
, the Pacific
Ocean
in normal
condition
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conditions
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is balance
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by cool and warm
water
and
wind blowing
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wind-blowing
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level
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levels
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in the east and
west
direction.
EI
Nino
changing
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changes
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the wind blowing level,
water
temperature and weather trend in
Austrian
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Austria
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and
Peru
while
nutrients are reduced to cause the number of fish
decrease
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. In
a
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apply
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normal
condition
, strong trade
winds
blowing
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blow
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in the east pacific to bring the cool
water
up
while
weak
winds
in the
west
pacific and
water
go westward. Nutrients are rich and create
the
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a
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good environment for the fish and other life in
sea
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the sea
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. Storm clouds focus on
west
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the west
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, which
bring
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brings
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the rainy day in
Austrian
and green grow healthy.
On
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opposite
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the opposite
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direction
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Peru
, there is enough sunshine and rich
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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ocean
life and
fishes
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fish
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.
EI
Nino
effect, which caused the blowing level change,
west
winds
are stronger than east
winds
,
whereas
the warm
water
pushed eastwards
then
cool
water
at the bottom. Storm clouds move to
east
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the east
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too
then
weather
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the weather
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pattern changed too.
Austrian
is more sunshine,
however
green is dead as less
of
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apply
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water
.
Peru
is
raining
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rainy
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and cloudy,
number
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the number
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of fish is reduced.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words condition, ei, nino, ocean, west, austrian, peru, water, winds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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