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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
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Sugar is being used as the main ingredient in lots of
food
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 and beverages items nowadays. The quantity of
carbohydrate
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 being used in the making of
food
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 items is very high which is affecting peoples health all over the world. But I believe increasing the price of those
products
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 is not the solution to the problem why.? In my opinion, we should educate people about the side effects of these
products
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 on their health rather than imposing regulation on the
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 industry for the prices to go up. Doing so would have negative consequences for the people who are working in the industry because they would not be able to sell their
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 due to being expensive and
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 lose lucrative market revenue.
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 of
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, people working with industry would lose their jobs and
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 increase unemployment.
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,
companies
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 should try to
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 natural sugar in their
products
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 without any additives or chemicals.
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 would make their
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 healthier to consume. Many
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 adopt
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 idea nowadays. But
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 has resulted in a price increase.
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 to that government should impose some regulations to instruct the
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 to
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 more natural carbohydrate ingredients in their
products
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. To conclude, I would say that
companies
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 should
use
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 natural sugar in making
food
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 items and show the public that they care about their health so that the public can
use
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 the
products
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 and stay healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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