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Many people believe it is better to study in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some educationists hold the view that studying in
groups
 is better for
students
 while others believe that studying alone is better.
This
 essay shall delve into the benefits of each
study
methods
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. There are many benefits of studying in
groups
.
To begin
 with, when you work with other
students
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,students
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 you are able to share your ideas and experiences
,
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 and have more time to do
this
.
For example
, if every student spends just two minutes talking individually to the teacher, the class time is soon finished.
However
, if
students
 work in
groups
 they can spend much more time talking to the teacher than just two minutes.
Secondly
, when we
study
 in
groups
this
 helps
students
 practise negotiation skills like making a contribution, agreeing or disagreeing with someone and asking a person to give examples of their point.
Finally
, we can put forward working in
groups
 as an example of what happens in real life, in work situations and say that studying in
groups
 in class prepares us for
this
.
On the other hand
, when
students
study
 alone
then
 they have no distractions and they can concentrate better on
study
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.
This
 is especially helpful in subjects like mathematics and physics. Studying alone
also
 increases the confidence and ability to solve problems on one‘s own.
Students
 become more competitive which is a necessary virtue in the competitive era of today. I feel that teachers should mix and match both these methods depending on the subject and the situation. For boring subjects like history and
philosophy
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students
 should be organised into
groups
 but for subjects that need concentration,
individual
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the individual
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study
 should be encouraged. Both methods have
own
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 importance and should complement each other rather than being treated as rivals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cooperative
  • Collaborative
  • Interact
  • Exchange ideas
  • Share knowledge
  • Motivate
  • Accountability
  • Engaged
  • Productive
  • Challenging
  • Distracting
  • Lack of focus
  • Conflict
  • Learning pace
  • Independent
  • Effective
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