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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Recently there is an upward trend that the quantity of
cars
 for personal use goes up dramatically. It has been a debatable question whether an increasing number of individual vehicles has an adverse impact on the
environment
. From my perspective,
although
cars
 pose a threat to the
environment
, citizens’ lives are more convenient and easier with their own
cars
 in daily lives.   Some people are strong advocates that the
environment
 are damaged seriously in recent 200 years due to the development of auto manufacturing.
In other words
, emissions of greenhouse gases
such
 as carbon dioxide and mercuries from vehicles are quite higher than people expect, which cause noxious air pollutions throughout the world.
Furthermore
, more citizens have lung diseases because of bad air quality;
therefore
, people’s life expectancies are shorter, meanwhile, the folks will not have a great sense of happiness if it is difficult for them to see the blue skies mostly.  
By contrast
, in most cases, others assert that
cars
 make people’s life more flexible and comfortable. There is no more limitation of distances with
cars
;
therefore
, citizens could choose places of living wherever they want according to their preferences. More importantly, the inventions of electric
cars
 might change ways of people’s lives and improve the
environment
 moderately.
For instance
, Tesla is the largest clean energy company that manufacture electric
cars
. It became well-known within a time span of ten years because it provides magnificent
environment
-friendly electric
cars
 for citizens.   In a word, the
environment
 is damaged moderately because of an increasing number of
cars
.
However
, the development of electric
cars
 could decrease the emissions of harmful gases. Meanwhile, people can enjoy themselves in their spare time due to more flexibility by their own
cars
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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