Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many
people
believe that it is
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to accept some negative
situations
when
occur
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whereas others argue that it is better to try to seek some solutions to deal with hard times in life. I will discuss both views in the essay below. On the one hand, there are several reasons supporting why
people
believe that we have to accept the bad conditions.
First
of all,
people
can not avoid all of
bad
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the bad

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events which happen around us and make us feel exhausted and depressed. Accepting a bad situation make
people
realize and acknowledge their mistakes.
For instance
, failures in business are opportunities for the leaders to know which strategies are comfortable for the company or acknowledge the defects in leading a company and improve them in the future. If we are accepting our circumstances,
this
can allow us to maintain a positive mood and to continue enjoying our life despite some difficulties.
On the other hand
,
other
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argue that we should have a good attitude and find ways to solve
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problem
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of bad
situations
instead
of accepting them. When struggling with negative events, it gives us
motivation
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to face
with
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and find solutions. In
this
way, we optimistically challenge ourselves and have a great impact on our life.
Furthermore
, when we strive and seek solutions, we could
also
broaden our limits and widen our horizons related to opportunities for bad
situations
.
For example
, if we lose our job, we will focus on finding a new job not only to solve the problem of being unemployed but
also
to improve the quality of living standard. In conclusion, I believe both sides of the argument have benefits.
However
, it seems to me that we had better try to deal with problems and enhance the
situations
instead
of accepting them.
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