In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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toddlers believe that if they keep hard-working, they will achieve whatever they want. They might learn
this
statement from their
parents
or other adults.
Although
it's so beneficial for them in their adolescence, it might hurt them in some situations which might be explained in the forthcoming paragraphs. One definite plus is that
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they would become triggered as they try so hard for a goal. Not only they would become so responsible but
also
they might learn to be a patient person in their adulthood. For ,example Albert Einstein never stopped trying for his dream and after some years he became one of the most important people ever.
As a result
,
this
sort of child will probably succeed. Another advantage is that they can experience a lot of situations which can make them so knowledgeable. It makes an intense sensation in the heart which makes them confident and self-conscious. A bit minus is that they might try some ways which might help them to do their desire as soon as possible. In
this
way, they might receive some shocking reaction from society like their family, friends and teachers of their school. So, they might have a troubled childhood which may affect and their adolescence and make a pessimistic generation. Another problem is that
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they tend to stomp up and down for their claims. These unsteady acts put too much pressure on
parents
. As a good example, most of the Iranian kids act clumsy for achieving their needs so
parents
are always so tired and children are so immature and stubborn. On balance, there are some benefits that are so useful for them.
However
, it should be controlled by
parents
to overcome the issues of
this
statement.
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