Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh the disadvantage?

In our ever-changing world, it is argued by a group of people that well-being is essential to all individuals around the globe,

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, it should not be run by

privately owned

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companies, whose main objective is to make

profit

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. From my perspective, I personally agree with the former statement

however

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believe that

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private

healthcare

services do have

a great deal of

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merits. It is unequivocal that

although

the public hospitals in most countries can be more common, they are usually overcrowded as well as underfunded which can put a lot of pressure on doctors, nursing staff and patients to cure and recover quickly so that more citizens can have treatment. Thereby, when people choose

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private services, it can help mitigate the issue by reducing the burden on the public system and as the result can

also

help to reduce the amount of money that government

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for funding.

In addition

to

this

, those who choose to pay for private systems will experience more benefits

such

as

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waiting times for appointments and operations, as well as

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more private and comfortable facilities.

However

, while there are a number of benefits to private

healthcare

, there are

also

numerous drawbacks

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.

First

and foremost, private

healthcare

insurance is very costly and many residents can not simply afford it,

consequently

leading to a major problem for the low-income groups especially the

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and the impoverished.

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systems

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also

require

annual

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fee

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to maintain

interests

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of customers whether they use the approach or not, and

therefore

many city-dwellers have to pay thousands of dollars each year but never have a chance to use these facilities.

As a result

, people assume

this

as a waste of expenditures.

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, it is

also

argued by ones that

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personal system can create an imbalance and inequality between groups of

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as only the wealthy can have sufficient cash for the best and quickest

treament

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treatment

available. To conclude, despite

of

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negative impacts of profit-making hospitals,

this

system can still exist and provide too many advantages as long as the administrations do their best to pay enough attention to public

healthcare

facilities and services.