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Some people say that to benefit the development of a child, the mother and father should take parenting classes. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some individuals have
this
 notion that both
parents
 should attend parenting courses due to their profit for rearing a
child
. I totally disagree with
this
 school of thought.
First
 and foremost, growing a
child
 is an instinctive behaviour.
Parents
 know how to raise a
child
 and protect their offspring from danger by instinct,
In addition
, due to differences in every
child
's personality
parents
 should try to know their baby's characteristics. It is aptly said, "
Child
 is the father of Man". Most
parents
 learn how to act towards their
child
 by experiencing different methods and
finally
 finding the best ones.
For example
, from the moment a baby is born his mother know how to feed him from her breast. It is said that mothers can feel their
child
's demands by their crying voices.
Furthermore
, every parent has their own way of parenting. It is not reasonable to force all
parents
 to rear their children in the same way, since there are cultural differences between every family.
In addition
, obligatory parenting courses mean that whether some
parents
 do not want to attend or have the time or plans for these
classes
 they should be punished. It is obviously impractical as well as unethical because of human freedom of choice. Some may argue that
parents
 can learn stages of their
child
's development in
such
classes
,
However
, I think community, neighbours, elderlies and
finally
 the society will help
parents
 to find any answer for their questions. to sum up, for thousand of years
parents
 rear their children without any
classes
. I believe in spite of some good points of these
classes
, forcing
parents
 to attend these ones is unreasonable.
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