You have been working for a company for some time, and other rival companies are willing to employ you with a higher salary for all the practical experience you have gained. Write a letter to your company manager and in your letter explain the situation, say what you would like the manager to do (increase the salary etc.), say what action you would take in case the manager fails to meet your demands.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Mr Aliyev, I am writing to say that some companies are inviting me to a job with a high wage, but I find that I need to notify you of it. As you know, I have been working for your company as a dressmaker for 2 years. During

this

Linking Words

time, we have worked as very good colleagues. I must say gratitude to you for

this

Linking Words

However

Linking Words

, a company which is located near my house is proposing me as a tailor for my experience. They are going to give me more earnings.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, their time at work is less than ours.

This

Linking Words

is more comfortable for me. Yet, I would like to request some things from you. If you provide me with enough money, fare to arrive at your work-shop, and decrease working time, I will not change my employment. If not, I will leave your company. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Kholida Turgunova

chartakinnovationWed May 10 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response

Ensure all requirements and expectations are clearly addressed in the letter.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the clarity and connection in the greeting and closing of the letter.

3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

159 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
The unlimited use of car caused many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use car? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
It is undeniable that cars offer flexibility and comfort, so owning a car has become essential for people. However, the excessive use of cars leads to a wide range of problems that we need to address.
7
band
You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter introduce yourself say why you are interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs
I am writing to express my interest in starting a course at your sports club. My name is E'zoza, and I am nearly 16 years old. I have been a team leader with 2 years of experience, but nowadays, I am particularly interested in sports.
6
band
Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is a common fact that being a professional athlete requires consistency in practising. As an effort to support their athletes, some countries build certain sports centers which are specialized only for professional athletes. In this situation I strongly believe that providing these facilities brings more benefits compared to the negatives.
7.5
band
Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Lately, a plethora of topics are being seriously discussed amongst various individuals and groups, and the prominent one is that everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. With several arguments to support it, I firmly agree with the statement given. This essay will list the reasons for my preference.
6.5
band
An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country
I hope this letter finds you in good health. I'm ecstatic to know that you are planning to visit India for the summer holidays and I shall try my best to guide you with the plan for your vacations.

The unlimited use of car caused many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use car? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter introduce yourself say why you are interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country