More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
In
this
day and age, it is a common belief that this
is fife in the city
is extremely difficult and I partially agree with this
point of view.I will shed light on my opinion in the following essay.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why living in the city
is difficulties
. Replace the word
difficult
Firstly
, the cost of living in the city
very
Add a missing verb
is very
Correct your spelling
high
hight
,
The fees Correct your spelling
high
people
have to pay for housing, appliances, and living expenses are higher than in rural areas . Secondly
, High pollution rates can affect people
's health such
as chronic diseases such
as cardiovascular disease, diabetes
... which have a higher incidence in cities. Correct word choice
and diabetes
Moreover
, the constructions
of numerous factories and the intensity of vehicles contaminate Fix the agreement mistake
construction
air
. Add an article
the air
For example
, people
nowadays usually use disposable items like disposable plactic
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plastic
containersor
spoons Correct your spelling
containers or
containers
instead
of recycled ones , which adversely affects the enviroment
.
Correct your spelling
environment
On the other hand
, It can be seen that the crime rate in the city
is much higher than in the countryside. The city
is a crowded place with people
, so the labor market will be very difficult and the problem of finding a job will be very painful, leading to people
being unemployed, they will be enticed to participate in crime. For example
, They don't have money to take care of their families, so they rob property, pickpocket and, more seriously, kill people
.
To sum up
, Living in urban areas has many advantages and disadvantages, everyone should consider them and the government should take some measures to improve the situation of
the gap between rich and poor.Change preposition
apply
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