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The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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Technology has advanced tremendously and significantly in the
last
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Although
 some opine that,
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This
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 requirements, as well as, catalyse and discipline them. It is agreed that for comprehension aim the ability of selective explanation
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 their assimilation degree, and the skilled instructor who is capable of fulfilling these varieties of learners need in form of rephrasing or simplifying his conception. Obviously, the computer-based teacher is not aimed at that humankind unique task.
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, these new devices are not ideal to dismiss
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human participation in teaching
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In addition
, motivation and discipline are critical keystones in the educational procedure.
This
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, the computer-based course is directed to implement in a constant non-interactive procedure.
Therefore
, human instructors could not be replaced fruitfully with advanced apparatus. To put it in a nutshell, though contemporary modern technology has a significant influence on our life, I personally believe that the
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 in favour of
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 lifestyle.
However
, we should utilise
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