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People in many countries are spending less time with their families. What are the reasons, and effects of this?

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Nowadays, most people all over the world spend their less
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 equal to gold with family members. In
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 essay, I will explain a few reasons and consequences that follow. Admittedly, today's parents spent a lot of
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 thinking about their job satisfaction and careers. For
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 , the reason they do not spend much
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 with family members without their knowledge. The saddest thing is that many families don’t pay much attention to their boys and each other because they are so tired after work. Another one of the biggest reasons is that many men tend to be drink alcohol and walk with some women. These can be barriers to spending
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 with the family and require great solutions today. As I said earlier, there is a possibility that parents will have a huge impact on their offspring because they are immersed in work and do have not had enough
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. In the future, they will cause their children to get into social trouble and become aloof, introverted and reserved. For ,example introverted persons will not be able to find their place in the future and will suffer for the rest of their lives.
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, they have been on bad terms begins to intensify the relative feuds and the regular drinking of men not only breaks family ties but
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 makes their teenagers pig-headed. To sum up, having people with their families is the only solution that can help prevent the most confusing topic of the day - divorce.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demands of the workplace
  • digital technology
  • social media
  • individualism
  • erosion of family bonds
  • emotional distance
  • strain relationships
  • emotional support
  • negative impact
  • emotional, social, and academic challenges
  • neglected
  • guidance and support
  • stress and mental health issues
  • anxiety
  • depression
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