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Nowadays more and more people are working from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#people #home
Many companies these days offer their employees the ability to
work
 at
home
,
as a result
, a large number of them are working in their house. There are numerous pros and cons of
this
 development.
Firstly
, the main benefit of following
this
 trend is not having to travel to your
job
 every day and wasting time and money on gas or bus tickets. Travelling to
work
 every day can sometimes be exhausting,
first
, because of the time needed to get to the company due to the morning and afternoon traffic jams and
second
, because of the money you need to spend to drive the car
,
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 or to pay your bus or train ticket. Another positive aspect of working at
home
 is the comfort that
people
 have when they
work
 at their own place.
This
 gives
people
 the feeling of relaxation and satisfaction because they do not have to dress up for
work
, they can wear anything in what they feel comfortable. But on the other side, there are some flaws in
this
 type of
work
. When working from the
home
one
 usually do not socialise with their coworkers and as a
,
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result
one
 can become lonely. When you are at
work
 and have a break, usually
people
 spent it with their coworkers, talking, having fun, but when
people
work
 at
home
, they are alone with their lap-tops, doing the
job
 with no
one
 to consult, to talk or even exchange ideas, so
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therefore
 it is lonely. Another disadvantage is that working from
home
 can make
one
's
job
 harder.
This
 can be, because of the distance of the
job
, technology equipment or even internet connection. All these reasons can make the
work
 needed to be done much complicated. To sum up, the trend of working from
home
 is increasing every day more and more.
This
 type of
work
 has both positive and negative sides.
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