Some people regard the video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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in recent decades,
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games
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have
bocome
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become
popular among
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.some
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argue that
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playing
video
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games
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have some benefit for them.
nevertheles
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nevertheless
,others believe that
video
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games
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bring some counterproductive effects in their lives.from my point of view ,there are some advantages and disadvantages in that matter which
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will explain here. on the one hand,it is true that nowadays, peoples live is filled with so much stress and
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anxiety
to work hard and earn enough money.
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, playing
games
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can be a great factor for revealing their stress and
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suppressing
suppress
their worries. it helps them to empty their mind and can be relaxed for a while .
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,some
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need a creative mind and rich
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imagination
.
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,
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who manufacture animations always need
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fresh
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and offer
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idea
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.so some
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make them creative and help them to come with new ideas.
on the other hand
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,some
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have
a great constructive effects
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a great constructive effect
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on
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s
mind
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. especially war
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which make
individuals
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more aggressive and
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.it can have
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serious
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impact on families and
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society
.
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children are the
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target of that matter.they are
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the influence of their parents so if they treat them in
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way ,children will feel unsupportive.
secondly
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, playing
video
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games
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addictes
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addicts
addicted
people
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easily. some
individuals
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have found
games
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as a way to escape and sink themselves to it to forget their obstacles and problems.it has
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brought some problems to
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society
too. in conclusion, it is right that
video
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games
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can entertain
individuals
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in
some
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various ways but it is obvious to me that has some counterproductive
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effects
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on
people
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and
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society
.
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