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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#production #consumer #goods #results #damage #environment
The pictures illustrate the structures of a city hospital in terms of 2007 and 2010. At a general glance, the
bus
 stops were grouped together and relocated while
two
 roundabouts on hospital
Road
 were added. An entrance in the East of the hospital was added, leading to the newly built public parking lot and the space that the multipurpose car park originally located was
then
 used for the staff-only. In 2007, the Ring
Road
 only led to Hospital
Road
 where the six
bus
 stops and multipurpose parking lot were located on the
two
 sides, after the reconstruction,
besides
 the entrance to the employees’ car park, there was another one on the left side leading to the patients’ parking lot in 2010. Before 2010, the Ring
Road
 was simply constructed around the City Hospital and led to the Hospital and City
Road
 by only
two
 paths, after some fixing periods, the paths going to the
two
 roads in the South were generated into
two
 roundabouts. Those new features
additionally
 made way to the
bus
 station which the
bus
 stops grouped together after 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumer goods
  • natural environment
  • damage
  • causes
  • overconsumption
  • demand
  • environmental regulations
  • enforcement
  • natural resources
  • industrial pollution
  • waste
  • inadequate
  • waste management practices
  • public awareness
  • education
  • sustainable alternatives
  • stricter environmental laws
  • recycling
  • responsible consumption
  • clean technologies
  • renewable energy
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