Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?
Today
using
state-of-the-art technologies Wrong verb form
the use of
such
as cellphone voice recorder and security
camera for controlling peoples’ behaviour are increasing that in numerous situations individuals are not aware of it. This
essay will outline both pros and cons and
followed by my own take on Correct word choice
apply
this
matter.
On the plus side, the advantages of monitoring people
without their awareness are manifold. To begin
with, this
would decline crimes. Simply put, governments and policies can find offenders quickly by using cellphone tracking as they have access to everyone
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everyone's
detail
and Fix the agreement mistake
details
setting
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by setting
security
cameras in cities. Take an accident as an example, the guilty driver may leave the crime sense but with the cameras in the streets, police are able to deter them. Moreover
, people
might install security
cameras to protect their properties in their homes. In this
way, they would increase safety and avoid robbery.
However
, the downside cannot be ignored. Being unaware about controlling
would destroy individuals’ privacy. In fact, it Change preposition
of control
destruct’s
peoples’ calmness because they feel they are under the pressure of these devices which monitor them. Verb problem
destroys
Furthermore
, people
consider these cutting-edge technologies as abuse. In other words
, they are concerned about their secrets and data that could be evolved so that others can abuse this
information in various ways. For instance
, asking for money for extorting.
In conclusion, monitoring people
through some gadgets in places where people
are unaware of it can be both rewarding and problematic, Although
I believe it may effects
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effect
individuals
privacy and create some abuse, it is beneficial in terms of providing Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
security
both
for society and dwellers. Add the preposition
with both
Hence
the merits overweight the drawbacks.Submitted by sa.parisa202 on
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