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Some people think that children’s free time must include educational activities otherwise they will waste their time. What is your opinion?

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Several
people
 believe that the free
time
 of
children
 should include activities which are educational or else it would be
fruitless
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 endeavour.
Although
 some hold the view that during the leisure
time
 of minors, they must engage in
conducts
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which
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that
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 would broaden their skills and enhance their educational output,
however
, I stand with them on
this
 position.
This
 essay will discuss why it is important for kids to
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be involved
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involved
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 in acts during their free
time
that is
 academically beneficial to them. To start with, younger folks during their leisure
time
 should engage in conducts which will teach them morals.
This
 is significant because
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it
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at
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it
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 can shape the way they behave not only to their peers but
also
 to elderly
people
.
For instance
, when we were growing up, my elder sibling and I played a game called "manners maketh man",
this
 game teaches us how to behave like a princess has
mold
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 our lives
such
 as not
to talk
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talking
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 whilst eating and to seat with
legs
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our legs
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 crossed.
Moreover
, I am of the opinion that
children
 must be occupied with educational
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 during their leisure
time
 or else it would be a waste of
time
.
Furthermore
, despite the fact that most
people
 say that no work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, I still believe that
children
 should be taught during their
play
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playtime
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time
 events that would teach them how to work with
team
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the team
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. To exemplify, most of the
time
, in our free
time
 when we were young, we used to play a game called six
cups
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Cup
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 which includes a team of 6, each with 5 players.
In addition
, involving in
an
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educational conduct during free
time
 as
children
 will definitely teach them how to work as a team when they grow. To conclude,
although
 some
people
 are of the view that
children
 should be occupied with educational activities during their free
time
,
however
, if they engaged themselves in it
otherwise
 it will yield them no
dividen
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dividend
dividends
 in the near future.
Nonetheless
, I still support
this
 view.
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