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Some people believe that all the children in school are required to learn at least one foreign language. However, others say that those who are not talented do not have to learn. What is your opinion?

As the
world
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 has globally interconnected, people from all over the
world
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 can easily talk to each other. By learning an extra
language
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, no matter where you are from, you can easily work with
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foreigners.
As a result
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, children are widely expected to learn a
second
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language
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 at a very young age, while others claim that it depends on the ability to adapt
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language
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 of each student.
Although
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 we cannot force an untalented child to learn something they are not good at, I myself believe that it is better to learn a foreign
language
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 as soon as possible. On the
one
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 hand, it is not really necessary for untalented students to learn a new
language
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, especially if their mother tongue is
one
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 of the most popular languages around the
world
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. Students who
are struggle
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 with their own
language
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 are unlikely to study any others
besides
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 their mother tongue.
Moreover
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, some people intend to live and work within their countries, so learning an extra
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 is just a waste of time.
On the other hand
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, learning at least
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 more
language
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 brings more benefits than harm.
First
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, there is no boundary between talented children and those who are not.
Therefore
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, it is difficult to point out whether
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 is talented enough to learn another
language
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 or not.
Second
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, some
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, especially English, is being widely used around the
world
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 in a great variety of areas,
such
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 as education, economics, and politics. Hardly can we gain new knowledge through English research,
for example
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; if it is not written in our
first
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language
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.
Third
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, children are able to quickly absorb
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a new
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language
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, so teaching them at a young age is definitely essential. To sum up, the ability to learn
new
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a new
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language
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 of each child plays an instrumental role in deciding if they are suitable
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this
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 subject.
However
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, I do believe
this
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 problem can be solved by
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 learning schedule for different students
,
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 because the advantages of learning a
second
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language
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outweighs
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 the disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • talented
  • beneficial
  • enhances
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural understanding
  • job prospects
  • option
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