In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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, some people hold the view that

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should be made to do community work due to the severity level of the crime. To be honest, I agree with

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some perspective,

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may not be the ideal place for educating

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. The fact remains that there are many

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, ranging from murderers to drug sellers in the

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, if less serious

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are sent to jail, they’ll be

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by those negative thoughts of the serious

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, leading to more and more

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. Take Vietnam as an example, almost every people commit less serious

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after taking a

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sentence, they even commit more serious

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than they used to. On that platform, when being in

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, they may endure bullying which may affect them both mentally and physically. As an inevitable result, revenge will be planned and

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again. Those who object

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work for less serious

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may agree that when they are in the perfect environment - outdoor,

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, they should reconsider that working outside can help

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with good people.

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positive way. In conclusion, with all of those aforementioned reasons, taking community service should be used for

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with less serious

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of a

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In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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