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Some people think personal happiness is closely related to economic success, while others believe that it depends on other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 think Rich
people
 are happier than poor
people
 just because they have more
money
, while others believe that
happiness
 is not only
money
 but
also
 rely on other factors. I mostly agree with the fact that
happiness
 is related to wealth but I
also
 do believe that
happiness
also
 depends on individual thoughts and personal expectations. The majority of
people
tend
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who tend
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 to work long hours in order to earn more
money
 shows the importance of economic success to many of us.
For example
, in
the
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apply
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most middle class and poor families, both parents work full time in my country to earn more
money
 because they believe they can live happily if they are wealthier. It replicates that
people
 who are not rich believe
money
 brings
happiness
 to them.
However
, rich
people
 don't seem to live
a
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happy life even though they are already economically successful.
For example
, according to news articles, Princess Diana who was a famous royalty suffered from depression because she had a toxic relationship with her husband. It is a great example of the fact that
money
 can't buy you
happiness
. In conclusion, some
people
 tend to believe that if you are wealthy you can be happy in most ways when some
people
 disagree with that fact saying it
also
 depends on other factors. In my
opinion
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 I think
happiness
 is relative to individual thoughts and expectations because there are some
people
 who are very poor but live happily with their families while some rich
people
 struggle to find
happiness
 and vice versa.
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