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Some people think human behaviors can be limited by laws, others think laws have little effect. What is your opinion?

#people #behaviors #laws #effect
In today's society, the law system become more and more
copelete
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complete
.
However
, do lows
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effect
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affect
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 human
behaviour
 or not become a controversial topic. Some
people
 argue that
law
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the law
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restict
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restrict
restricts
people
's well-being while others say that it has little effect. In my opinion, I agree with the former one and in
this
 essay, I will
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explain
 my support
to
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for
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this
 view. In my opinion,
laws
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law
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is
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are
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 a strong weapon
which
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that
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 can
limited
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limit
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people
's
behaviour
especially
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,especially
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 bad ones.
Becasue
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Because
laws
 let
people
 know what can do and what can not do
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otherwise
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other wise
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otherwise
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 they will get punishments.
For example
, we have
laws
 to
forbidden
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illgeal
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illegal
 hunting and animal saling. These kinds of
law
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laws
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established
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were established
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 in order to protect
will
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wild
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 animals.
People
 used to hunt and kill animals for economic reasons
whcih
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which
 led some species
are
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to be
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 endangered.
Laws
 can change
people
's
behaviour
 and no more
people
 hurt animals anymore.
Laws
 are good for our society and
it
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they
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 work
effenciency
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efficiency
. Because
laws
 show the result
people
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of people
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 who
does
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do
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 not obey
it
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them
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.
People
willl
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will
 pay money or even lose free to stay in a prison because of their illegal
behaviour
. Most
of
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people
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the people
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 do not want to see
this
 so they will not do
such
 things
whicl
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which
are not allow
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are not allowed
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in
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in-laws
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laws
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the laws
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. In sum,
laws
 can change
people
's
behaviour
.
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