Some people think that newspaper are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get new better from other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion

These days
people
can get
news
from other
platforms
like radio, phone, tv etc. But many
people
still think that
newspaper
is better than other
media
platforms
. On one hand
its
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better to read in
news paper
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newspaper
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because older
people
doest like reading it
on
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different ways they must be having
a
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eyesight issue rather than
this
they
dont
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don't
know how to
use
or operate that kind of platform.
Newspaper
is more
covient
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convenient
for them and they are used to it because of in their generation these kinds of
platforms
were not invented. On
other
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another hand
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hand
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as per
this
generation
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many technologies have
invented
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and mostly
youngster
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use
it
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them
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people
use
this
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these
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techologies
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technologies
.
for example
television, mobile phone ,radio etc.
People
can easily read
news
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the news
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by only on one click but one drawback for
this
is
people
can damage their eye
this
can cause to a big problem whereas
this
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platforms
is more
cionvient
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convenient
From my point of
view
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other
media
platform is better rather than
newspaper
because it is free of cost and we can save paper. To sum up
newspaper
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newspapers
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and other
media
platforms
have
invented
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been invented
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but many
people
use
media
platforms
to read
news
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the news
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as per
this
generation but older
people
still
use
newspaper
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newspapers
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