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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #world
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life will become easier if the world has
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 number of
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 ,as with passing years many tongues are not being used anymore ,whereas some people assumed that ,
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 situation which can lead to the worsts consequences .I strongly agree with
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 statement as fewer
languages
 ease communication and aid in relocating to other countries for work or study objectives
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communication between individuals and society becomes a lot easier when fewer idioms are present . Many people
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sense
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 of comfort and familiarity if they know the tongue they are to communicate in especially while
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 to America as they can speak ad understand English well .
In addition
 to that , limited
languages
 aid people to migrate to other countries for the purpose of work . One of the main problems faced up to
languages
 barrier be it while purchasing products renting a house or figure out
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 idioms would help puzzle out
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problem
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state
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. To
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private medical
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 and Indian famous hospitals
such
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, New health life that every year they will exchange with experience and medical
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 workers to boost their medical skills
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 readily agree as English are widely spoken in India . In conclusion , I reiterate that usage of more popular tongues as less
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 ones fade over years can make life less hard mainly as conservation would be easy and shifting to another land for work would be
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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