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Many clamlm that the fast-food industry has a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In current years, the fast-
food
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 business has grown in popularity. Many people believe that fast
foot's
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food's
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 widespread availability has a harmful influence on humans and
environment
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the environment
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. And I totally agree with
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. There are numerous drawbacks to fast
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 eating.
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 with,
the
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apply
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fast
food
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 is extremely high in calories and contains preservatives that are damaging to our
body
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.
As a result
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, it easily
cause
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causes
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 obesity, diabetes and heart disease.
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, plastic
plastic
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packaging or plastic bags are used to package these foods. The rise in fast
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 consumption is
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 contributing to environmental pollution, especially in rivers and streets.
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, people should cook together at home
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 of buying fast
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 to protect the health of the entire family.
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, it's a wonderful way for us to rekindle family feelings and save money. In conclusion, fast
food
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 has a negative impact on many different aspects of our life.
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, I think it's very critical to figure out solutions to replace unhealthy foods in order to reduce pollutions and avoid many health problems.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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