It is usually debated that whether Homework is a vital part of school cariculum or not.I acknowledge that it has a wide range of benifits.However it has some drawbacks too.Dicuss both the views and write your openion

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It is usually argued that
homework
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is an important part of
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school
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the school
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and is vital in
learning
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the learning
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of a child
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on the other
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hand
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some believe that work done by the students in their classroom is more than sufficient for their learning.Both points have equally valid arguments some of which are discussed below. In
todays
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world
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the pressure on a
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school going
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child has grown exponentially.
one
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of the major
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for it is the amount of
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teachers expect their students to complete in their homes.Today an average student usually works on his home assignments 2-3 hours a day and
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on top of 6 to 7 hours of
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time he has already spent
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his day.Childhood is the time in a
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life
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he should be left free so that he can explore his or
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interests,dreams,compassions,likes or dislikes etc.
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burdening them with so much
homework
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their
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tender age we are restricting their personal growth to just academics and not giving them any space to grow in any other fields like sports,arts,drama etc. which are equally important.
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hand
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homework
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also
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plays a vital role in the
school
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cariculum
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curriculum
because just focusing on lessons taught at schools by their respective teachers is not enough.One should
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focus on
self learning
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which can be done only when a student
spents
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spends
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time studying at home or doing
homework
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.When a child does
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than
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only he or she understands what are their strong suits and where they need more work,on
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topics he or she
as
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achieved mastery and where he or she still lacks some understanding.
To conclude
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homework
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is a vital part of learning and can not be
elimanated
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eliminated
but the amount of work assigned should be kept in check so that it does not
over
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burdens
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burden
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the children and
also
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helps them in their academics.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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