In some countries, changes in the amount of rainfall have led to a serious shortage of water and governments are now under pressure to find solutions that address this problem. What are some of the problems that lack of water causes and what can be done to save water in the future?

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in the environment directly affecting rainfall might be
due to
global warming, which
further
leads to the shortage of
water
and the authorities are under a burden to solve
this
major problem. There are some countable issues, which are caused by deficiency of
water
. The measures to conserve
water
should
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into force. Let's delve deeper into the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, if we talk about
its'
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troubles, there are certainly major problems which we will have to suffer a lot. As we know human
body
contains 70%
of
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water
, the majority of parts of a
persons'
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body
like
body
fluids,
for instance
, WBCs, RBCs,
and
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capillaries etcetera carry
water
in every corner of the
body
and perform their functions. In all these vessels major part of the
water
is carried out in the form of blood.
Furthermore
, a large part of agriculture depends upon
water
, like irrigation, which is essential
particularly
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for cornfields
as well as
wheat
instead
of other crops. it is
a truth
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that the whole world not only
consuming
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food in the form of these major grains but
also
earning
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a lot of money. Let's move on to its solutions,
no
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doubt
drink
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has become a necessity for every individual, but we can
do
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some efforts to save it. Rainwater storage is one of the best solutions.
As in some
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countries,
for example
, China,
participating
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in
storage
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of rainwater. They are filtering it and consuming it as drinking
water
,
therefore
these ways should be implemented everywhere.
Furthermore
, as most of the community is just careless when they fill their
water
tank and forget to switch
off
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, it is most commonly seen in the Indian villages where
water
is freely flowing and there is no proper drainage system which
further
leads to stagnation of
water
and people becoming sick
due to
more gathering of mosquitos and flees. The government should strictly impose some laws against
such
kinds of neglections In conclusion,
although
we know life is nothing without a drink, so why we are so unaware
.
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Everybody should be aware and should do their full participation in saving the drink. The administration should take action against the
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of drinks and should conduct seminars in every village.
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