Some people say that all popular TV programmes should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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to educate viewers due to the view of some people. Mostly, topics are predicted to be about social issues.

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I will try to present my own opinion

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the statement. Unfortunately, every person must have

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society.

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with information.

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, according to some people,

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my point of view is severely opposite since of some reasons

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of political and social problems that occur

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TV and each kind of social media. Unlike the offered method of reporting global issues, relaxing with fancy programmes would have

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more immense impact on the people. But why is it so? If someone

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problems. While others walk around with thoughts filled with confusing topics, we would be open mind and free from thoughts

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. To conclude, it would be better to avoid global-overgeneralized problems in some popular channels or at least make them less stressful and annoying.

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action can help to protect our mental safety and be more productive.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Influence public opinion
Viewer engagement
Desensitization
Social consciousness
Target demographics
Public health messaging
Psychological impact
Social narrative
Edutainment (educational entertainment)
Viewer fatigue
Multi-faceted approach
Public service broadcasting
Cultural impact
Media literacy

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