Some people say that all popular TV programmes should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Surprisingly, every TV
shows
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to educate viewers due to the view of some people. Mostly, topics are predicted to be about social issues.
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this
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I will try to present my own opinion
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the statement. Unfortunately, every person must have
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way
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society.
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government
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always tries to supply
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mankind
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with information.
However
, according to some people,
this
is not as enough as discussing global topics in all TV programmes. Whatever
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my point of view is severely opposite since of some reasons
such
as mental and emotional necessities of human.
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, everyone would be bored and stressed under
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of political and social problems that occur
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TV and each kind of social media. Unlike the offered method of reporting global issues, relaxing with fancy programmes would have
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more immense impact on the people. But why is it so? If someone
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watched
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programme
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of listening to issues, he or she would be completely relaxed before solving
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problems. While others walk around with thoughts filled with confusing topics, we would be open mind and free from thoughts
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do not have any demand in our
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. To conclude, it would be better to avoid global-overgeneralized problems in some popular channels or at least make them less stressful and annoying.
In addition
,
this
action can help to protect our mental safety and be more productive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Influence public opinion
  • Viewer engagement
  • Desensitization
  • Social consciousness
  • Target demographics
  • Public health messaging
  • Psychological impact
  • Social narrative
  • Edutainment (educational entertainment)
  • Viewer fatigue
  • Multi-faceted approach
  • Public service broadcasting
  • Cultural impact
  • Media literacy
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