Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Civilians believe that having more

police

on the streets will help to combat

crime

but

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not true. Countries

which

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have more population like India is suffering a lot with

crime

rates even though they have a good amount of

police

on the

street

crime

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the crime

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rate is

unmanagable

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unmanageable

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. I disagree with the belief that more

police

is not the best way to combat

crime

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we have job opportunities worldwide I believe that crimes are increasing due to money shortage. People who earn less for their monthly expenses are struggling to run their life for day-to-day edibles which leads to simple

crime

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crimes

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like pick-pockets, gold chain snatching, vehicle theft. Even we have more

police

on the

street

it's not possible to get the

crime

under control because expenses are increasing than the penny we earn.

On the other hand

, Educating children from childhood with self-respect and discipline may result in less

crime

, unless we educate children with moral values from childhood

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not possible to get rid of crimes. Even we have more

police

street

its

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our individual

responsibilities

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responsibility

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to be safe and protective. whereas, to help

police

to reduce

crime

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the crime

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rate in a country, people should be more responsible than

police

because they are the one who is going to bear the loss due to that

crime

. We cannot simply blame

police

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the police

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for every

crime

rather we should react immediately when we see any small

crime

in front of us. An effective way of reducing

crime

is to act as soon as possible if it happens in front of us. Whenever there is a

crime

we should be more vigilant and should know the cause of the

crime

to avoid that in future whereas some fail to do that. I disagree that more

police

on the

street

is not

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good idea to control

crime

instead

educating moral values from childhood will help to reduce

crime

as expected and

also

more job opportunities. If people have enough money to spend, there will be no

crime

street

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