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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A group of
people
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predispose
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 to do the repeat thing and out of the
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life time
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believe
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belive
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believe
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. The reason is that they might scare when the
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 of their control.
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, if something were changed, they might be
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, what the meaning of our
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car and
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,
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machine. Those examples
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 that
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 are changing the world.
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, some
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 is good for them. I agree
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this
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similarly
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 can bring
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 thing to us.
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people
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 want to travel different to discover
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new things.
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 they know can be death, but they still travel so they discovered the new land. In conclusion, a group of
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 to avoid the
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 for facing the worst case. While, other
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people
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 always is a good thing because they
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think
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 in the world, a lot of
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 had been invented because
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people
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thing
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 is important than sitting there and
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 nothing better.
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, I believe the
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 a good thing for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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