Recycling is now an essential measure: it is time for everyone in society to become more responsible towards the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays the amount of
garbage
has reached cosmic proportions and threatens the existence of the Earth. I totally agree with the sentence that it is time for humanity to become more responsible towards the environment and I will try to prove it in
this
essay.
Through
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the centuries, the history of human civilization
was
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always related to processing natural resources and producing goods and services. Some archaeological finds suggested that in the bronze
age
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humans were forced to cut off most forests in Asia Minor and Near East in order to derive charcoal and to smelt the tools and arms from the ore. Nowadays, it is commonly believed that we all are living in a civilization based on oil processing.
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it
widely known
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, the backside of
the
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oil processing is plastic
producing
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. Thanks to
this
magnificent material it has been possible to create a global market oversaturated with consumer goods. Because of the cheap plastic and cheap petroleum products human well-being has never been so high as it can be seen now.
On the other hand
, the side effect of
this
process
became
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the production of huge
garbage
amounts.
While
scientific and technical progress is taking place, more and more rubbish is been being produced by humanity.
Due to
this
situation
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we have already faced dangerous climate changes,
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disappearing
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some
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biological species, deforestation and depletion of raw materials.
Moreover
, some people believe that most of the plastic
garbage
is not buried in a landfill but is just thrown on land and
then
ends up in rivers and oceans. Thanks to it the most conspicuous ocean rubbish congestion named the Great Pacific
garbage
patch can be seen by the eye in space. In conclusion,
although
the scientific-technical progress and processing of raw materials let humanity achieve prosperity that has never been so high, now we are faced with the challenge of recycling that needs to be fulfilled in the near future ,
otherwise
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society will have to pay too much price for the progress.
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