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Recycling is now an essential measure: it is time for everyone in society to become more responsible towards the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays the amount of
garbage
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 has reached cosmic proportions and threatens the existence of the Earth. I totally agree with the sentence that it is time for humanity to become more responsible towards the environment and I will try to prove it in
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Through
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 the centuries, the history of human civilization
was
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 always related to processing natural resources and producing goods and services. Some archaeological finds suggested that in the bronze
age
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 humans were forced to cut off most forests in Asia Minor and Near East in order to derive charcoal and to smelt the tools and arms from the ore. Nowadays, it is commonly believed that we all are living in a civilization based on oil processing.
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widely known
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, the backside of
the
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oil processing is plastic
producing
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. Thanks to
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 magnificent material it has been possible to create a global market oversaturated with consumer goods. Because of the cheap plastic and cheap petroleum products human well-being has never been so high as it can be seen now.
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, the side effect of
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 process
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 the production of huge
garbage
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 amounts.
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 scientific and technical progress is taking place, more and more rubbish is been being produced by humanity.
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situation
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 we have already faced dangerous climate changes,
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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some
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of some
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 biological species, deforestation and depletion of raw materials.
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, some people believe that most of the plastic
garbage
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 is not buried in a landfill but is just thrown on land and
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 ends up in rivers and oceans. Thanks to it the most conspicuous ocean rubbish congestion named the Great Pacific
garbage
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 patch can be seen by the eye in space. In conclusion,
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 the scientific-technical progress and processing of raw materials let humanity achieve prosperity that has never been so high, now we are faced with the challenge of recycling that needs to be fulfilled in the near future ,
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society will have to pay too much price for the progress.
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task response
Well done on addressing the task by agreeing with the statement and providing relevant reasons and examples. However, make sure to fully address all aspects of the task to provide a complete response.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates strong coherence and cohesion with a clear logical structure, introduction, and conclusion. Keep this up by ensuring smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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