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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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 as style and consumer goods. There are several reasons why I think humans want to correspond to the present period. The
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 and perhaps the most significant reason is the huge demand for the latest items. In the other words, people feel the need to possess items they have been at a friend. Manufacturers use celebrities to increase sales making them believe they are using
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, word famous is Dimash Kudaibergen, he recently advertised "oppo" that was not so popular at the time, but after Dimash showed up on the billboards with that smartphone, the sales increased threefold. So, it is clear that because of stars all sales can go up and whether it is bad quality or not. It is particularly significant that consumers are purchase items to imitate their friends. They could buy products and services which not be required at all. In fact, humans tend to follow their ideal to an extent , possibly, they
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 long, because it costs so much. The logical conclusion would be all people copy the best of us, but I still strongly believe that we should not copy all qualities of our ideal person, cause everyone got to have their difference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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