In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recent years are much more distinct from the previous times when human values, priorities and thinking ways were much purer than now. And mentioning the essay theme about sporting competitions' champions, who merely desired to win a match or to be the
first
who has done an outstanding world record, here we can even be
witnessed
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that nowadays some athletes are more likely to take a part in
such
rivalries just for gaining some
money
and conquer worldwide recognition.
To begin
with,
sports
events have never been aimed
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order to make people struggle for the prize in form of
money
. In the
first
place, from the very antique centuries, these competitions have been held to show men's body power and to encourage people to lead a healthy lifestyle.
However
, as I mentioned above, the time and things around us are changing faster than time is, so now we are likely to have an opposite occurrence:
money
is a sense of your life. Undeniably,
this
opposite side of people's priority and approach for the
sport
demands meticulous thinking and contributes to an indifferent attitude to the
sport
.
For instance
, in my country, Kyrgyzstan, one of the booming
sports
which is preferred predominantly in the
last
5-10 years is fighting. Young athletes and sportsmen draw attention more to build their own careers and crave to possess a decent financial package.
This
happens because of the inability of our poor government to maintain a normal life standard. In turn,
this
phenomenon leads to misunderstood of the
sports
culture itself.
In addition
, the golden core of
sport
might be blurred in not that far years. Summarising the recited by me above, the omnipresent occurrence of blurred understanding the
sport
itself, in the future will affect adversely to the meaning of
sport
, contributing youngsters to only win some
money
to enter the door of a better life and at the same time diminishing the quality and world-best-recorded results,
thus
contributing to the stagnation in
sports
development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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