Today people have unhealthy diets and do not exercise. What do you think why it is so. What are the reasons? Suggest some solutions for solving this situation.

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have become popular among communities.people almost do not care about what they choose to eat or devote their time to exercise .
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of diseases and problems
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will explain in here.
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of fast food ,peoples
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is changed.nowadays individuals are busy with work and have no time to cook so they prefer to buy unhealthy food.going to
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and they like to try different food.
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, obesity and
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diabetes
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of technology,most of the
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worked with computers and employees spend so much of their time in front of them and all day they seat on one spot.
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they become fat and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • processed foods
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • balanced diet
  • exacerbates
  • implement policies
  • active transportation
  • promote availability
  • affordability
  • innovative technological solutions
  • motivate
  • awareness
  • dietary habits
  • exercise routines
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