IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#marriage #people #trend #effects #society #right #type
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It’s a common belief that gay
marriage
Use synonyms
 has adverse effects on society.
However
Linking Words
, I firmly believe that everyone has the right to pursue happiness, and it is no difference between a gay man and a normal man. So that, gay
marriage
Use synonyms
 should be legal in the world.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, gay couples are human too, so they have the full right to be treated as normal couples. So that the law should protect them, not against them. We should give them freedom like the other people because being gay is not turning you into a criminal.
Moreover
Linking Words
, they still can contribute to their country and maybe they can even influence better than normal people. They can be a huge human resource for their country. On top of that, if the government ban gay
marriage
Use synonyms
 and force them to the dead end, it can lead to some serious consequence.
For example
Linking Words
, the parents force their
boy
Use synonyms
 to marry a girl when they know the
boy
Use synonyms
 is gay, it can affect the
boy
Use synonyms
's
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
. The
boy
Use synonyms
 can become stubborn and does not listen to his parents anymore. And in the worst case, the
boy
Use synonyms
 can even commit suicide if the parents keep avoiding his true sex. In conclusion, gay people are still human so we should treat them equally. It’s clear that accepting gay
marriage
Use synonyms
 is more beneficial than declining it.
Submitted by gloriousnguyen2612 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: