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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Pie
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The pie
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 chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 three
ifferent
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different
 reasons
of
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for
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water
 usage
in
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on
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 six variety continents.
Overall
,it
is clearly demonstrate
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is clearly demonstrated
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 that all of these world areas
most
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are most
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 likely to
use
water
 for agriculture more than industrial and domestic proposes The highest percentage of activities that people around the world
use
water
 is agriculture
us
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apply
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.As we look at
pie
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the pie
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 charts,the proportion of
water
 usage for farming is
approximently
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approximately
 32% to 88%. Central acquires the highest proportion of
water
 in agriculture usage-88% of
water
.
On the other hand
,people
unlikely
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are unlikely
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 to
use
water
 for domestic
reason
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reasons
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such
 as washing dishes,
plantong
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planting
 and doing laundry. The percentage of usage is around only 7% to a maximum
19
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of 19
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%.From the
obervation
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observation
,South America is a continent that
use
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uses
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water
 and South East Asia maintain the lowest percentage in term of domestic people
of
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apply
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using
water
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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