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The bar graph demonstrates the reasons for adults’ decision to study, and the pie chart illustrates the expected proportions for who should pay. Overall,
people
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 share distinct reasons for their choices, where personal interests and the objective to gain qualification are the top two causes.
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,
people
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 vote that three counterparts, taxpayers, employers, and
individuals
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 are responsible for adult education costs. In terms of the
first
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 graph, the results suggest that many
people
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 choose multiple factors with personal interests taking up the largest part, and the least frequent choice is to meet
people
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, 40% and 9%, respectively.
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, aiming to acquire qualification is the
second
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 largest reason, accounting for 38%, while for the purpose to change job is a low-frequency option as well, 12%.
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, the other three reasons are:
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, as it is beneficial to the current job, 22%;
secondly
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, in order to improve the promotion prospect, 20%;
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, merely enjoying learning, 20% too. Regarding the allocation of the adult education costs, the major part of it is reckoned to be paid by
individuals
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, accounting for 40%, followed by employers, whose percentage is 35%, 5% less than
individuals
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, while taxpayers make up the
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 25%, 15% less than
individuals
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.
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