2- Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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increase in lack of
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is a common
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among
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modern education. Some people believe that
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should take a lead in teaching them, while others contradict and opine that
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issue. In the essay, both views will be discussed in detail before my conclusion will be reached. On the one hand,
teachers
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play a vital
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in forming
children
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's
discipline
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as they mostly spend time with kids, which may be more than
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are able to impose the regulation and rules of schools to punish students who violate the rule and lack
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discipline
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including being late,
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forgetting
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homeworks
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homework
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, smoking
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, drinking alcohol, and so on.
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,
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can be formed by the legislation and penalty that are implemented by the responsibility of
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.
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is the person who
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as the
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model to offsprings so they significantly affect
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's behaviour, characteristic, and
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. According to educational researches, kids ages 1 - 8 years old will duplicate every behaviour of their
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so that it is apparent that offspring will behave
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to
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. From my experience, I realise
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that I get the bad habits from my father
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as drinking alcohol and smoking
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.
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those things when I was young. In conclusion, from my perspective, both
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and
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play a crucial
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in forming
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discipline
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of
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because they can teach what is right or wrong, and can be
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good
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model for them.
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, it depends on
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themselves
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from
those well-wisher
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or not.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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