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Should apply same laws on TOCCBCO those apply on heroine? Discuss

The importance of
laws
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 about
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 which
always
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 debatable has now become more controversial with some
people
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deem
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deeming
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 that not only some
laws
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 which ban the sale and
consumption
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 of heroin but
also
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 on
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 which are two
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thing
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things
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.
In
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this
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 essay will discuss
about
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apply
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this
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trend
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 and give a logical conclusion. There are myriad reasons why
people
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 deem that sam
laws
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 impose on
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 due to some bad effects of
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 on
body
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the body
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that is
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 why
people
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 believe
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trend
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.
Basecally
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Basically
consumption
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 of
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 which was not good for
human
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the human
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 body because it is harsh effects on health and some part of body failure due to high level of
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tobbacco
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tobacco
consumption
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that is
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 why some
people
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 would think that
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 should ban on their country.
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Tobbacco
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Tobacco
which
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apply
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is addicted
products
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that is
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 why
people
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 have some problems to away
to
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with
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tobbacco
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tobacco
on
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in
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 their daily routine. One of the other reasons
which
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apply
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is
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are
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people
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 support
this
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trend
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.
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However
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 there are some of
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this
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these trends
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trend
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 in my point of view. The
first
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 and foremost is that
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tobbacco
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tobacco
 and heroin
which
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are two
difference
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different
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 thing and two
difference
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different
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product
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 for
people
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that is
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 why it is impossible to
applied
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 to same
laws
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 on
these
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this aresome tobbacco product
these aresome tobbacco products
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aresome
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are some
awesome
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tobbacco
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tobacco
product
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that is
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usefull
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useful
 for countries and some country important part of
economy
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the economy
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 because they are growing tobacco and sell to
other country
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another country
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 why they are earning money and run ecosystem. To conclude according to the argument one can reach
conclusion
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the conclusion
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 that tobacco is
different
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a different
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product
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compar
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compared
compare
 with heroin
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 why the law is
also
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 different to
appiled
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applied
on
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to
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product
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