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Causes and Effects of the popularity of Fast-food restaurants

Unlike in current
times
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people
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 used to enjoy healthy kinds of
food
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 and opted for mainly home-made dishes in recent past just until a few decades ago. Fast
Food
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 chains like
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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, Burger King and KFC are known by
people
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 of all ages and have already been accepted by most of the societies, being available almost in every region of the city.
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,
this
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 tendency has underlying causes along with undeniable and sometimes irreversible effects.
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 of all, the main reason lying behind the
popularity
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 of
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fast-
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fast food
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food
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 is it less
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time consuming
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. The
game changer
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 in
this
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 sphere was the
time
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 after the introduction of McDonald’s
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 serving strategy. As the world is becoming more adapted to technology, speed is one of the leading
factors
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.
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, unlike in the past decades,
people
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 now have less
time
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 to spend in the kitchen treating themselves
with
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a healthy home-made
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healthy home-made food
a portion of healthy home-made food
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food
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.
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, they grab a burger and a glass of coke on the go, saving themselves some
time
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. It is much faster for the
people
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 who work long hours, who work in 2 different jobs along with students who spend even a big chunk of their leisure
time
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 by studying for their finals and working in part-
time
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 jobs.
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, the
popularity
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 of fast
food
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, undeniably, comes from the taste of the most kinds of
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fast-
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fast food
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food
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 like burgers, pizza, French fries and onion rings. It is borne out by
researches
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researchers
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 that the high amounts of additives, sugar and sodium
makes
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 the
food
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 delicious. Eventually, these products lead to obsession; every
time
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people
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 consume fast
food
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, their bodies get adapted to the taste, requiring even more amount of the
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 afterwards.
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, the appearance,
in particular
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, creates the illusion
making
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 the
food
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 look appetizing.
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 illusion is mainly created due to commercial reasons. It is known that the appearance of
food
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 highly affects taste buds, tricking
people
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’s perceptions. At
last
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, but not at least, the
popularity
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 and the reason why
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fast-
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fast food
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food
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 is because of the price factor. In developed countries like America and
Canada
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 the price of
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fast-
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fast food
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food
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 is relatively cheaper than healthy and organic foods.
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, it is more affordable
by
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 the lower segment and students. In
such
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kind
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kinds
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 of restaurants, one can have a fulfilling meal for the price just low as 3 dollars and have
limitless
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 amount of soft-drink high in calories and sugar, which is not
also
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 the healthiest option to prevent your thirst. In some
fast-
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food
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 restaurants, especially pizzerias, they offer
free
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 portion of French fries or onion rings once a customer buys a medium pizza;
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 kind of campaign encourage
fast-
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food
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 consumption, not only regarding personal
factors
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,
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 but
also
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 heavily monetary
factors
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. Apart from being
popular
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the popular
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 and most
favored
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 type of
food
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, fast
food
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 has some serious effects on human
health
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.
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,
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 it is less
time
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-consuming, convenient, tasty and cheaper, the impact on human
health
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 goes beyond just gaining weight. The major
fast-
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food
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 related
health
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 issues are increased levels of obesity, heart disease and stroke, type 2 diabetes.
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 the physical
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, researches suggest that over-consumption of
fast-
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food
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 leads to mental
health
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 problems
such
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 as depression and anxiety due to the high levels of chemicals affecting human mood. To conclude, the
popularity
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 of
fast-
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food
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 apparently is due to the adaption to modern
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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, as well as some financial issues that
people
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 have to deal with. The
fast-
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food
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consumption related
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 problems are reaching epidemic levels and the matter is becoming worse every passing day. Being aware of the effects and possible
health
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 issues may help to reduce the amount of
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 consumed and opt for healthier foods like fruit and vegetables.

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