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2. We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
It is true that we are living in a global
village
. Every
country
 of the
world
 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
 to play in
society
. Some
people
 think that
one
 cannot help
everyone
 in
society
 who is in need.
Therefore
,
people
 should only
show
concern
 to the
inhabitants
 of their own
country
 and
community
. I completely disagree with the
statement
 for the following
reason
.It is true that we are living in a global
village
. Every
country
 of the
world
 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
 to play in
society
. Some
people
 think that
one
 cannot help
everyone
 in
society
 who is in need.
Therefore
,
people
 should only
show
concern
 to the
inhabitants
 of their own
country
 and
community
. I completely disagree with the
statement
 for the following
reason
.It is true that we are living in a gl
obal
Correct your spelling
global
village
. Every
country
 of the
world
 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
 to play in
society
. Some
people
 think that
one
 cannot help
everyone
 in
society
 who is in need.
Therefore
,
people
 should only
show
concern
 to the
inhabitants
 of their own
country
 and
community
. I completely disagree with the
statement
 for the following
reason
.It is true that we are living in a global
village
. Every
country
 of the
world
 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
 to play in
society
. Some
people
 think that
one
 cannot help
everyone
 in
society
 who is in need.
Therefore
,
people
 should only
show
concern
 to the
inhabitants
 of their own
country
 and
community
. I completely disagree with the
statement
 for the following
reason
.It is true that we are living in a global
village
. Every
country
 of the
world
 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
 to play in
society
. Some
people
 think that
one
 cannot help
everyone
 in
society
 who is in need.
Therefore
,
people
 should only
show
concern
 to the
inhabitants
 of their own
country
 and
community
. I completely disagree with the
statement
 for the following
reason
.
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