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2. We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
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It is true that we are living in a global
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. Every
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 of the
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 is connected to each other and every individual has a
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 to play in
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. Some
people
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 think that
one
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 cannot help
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 in
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 who is in need.
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,
people
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show
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concern
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 to the
inhabitants
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 of their own
country
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 and
community
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. I completely disagree with the
statement
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 for the following
reason
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.It is true that we are living in a global
village
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. Every
country
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 of the
world
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 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
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 to play in
society
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. Some
people
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 think that
one
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 cannot help
everyone
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 in
society
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 who is in need.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should only
show
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concern
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 to the
inhabitants
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 of their own
country
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 and
community
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. I completely disagree with the
statement
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 for the following
reason
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.It is true that we are living in a gl
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global
village
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. Every
country
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 of the
world
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 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
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 to play in
society
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. Some
people
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 think that
one
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 cannot help
everyone
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 in
society
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 who is in need.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should only
show
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concern
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 to the
inhabitants
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 of their own
country
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 and
community
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. I completely disagree with the
statement
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 for the following
reason
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.It is true that we are living in a global
village
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. Every
country
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 of the
world
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 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
Use synonyms
 to play in
society
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. Some
people
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 think that
one
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 cannot help
everyone
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 in
society
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 who is in need.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should only
show
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concern
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 to the
inhabitants
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 of their own
country
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 and
community
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. I completely disagree with the
statement
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 for the following
reason
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.It is true that we are living in a global
village
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. Every
country
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 of the
world
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 is connected to each other and every individual has a
role
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 to play in
society
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. Some
people
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 think that
one
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 cannot help
everyone
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 in
society
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 who is in need.
Therefore
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,
people
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 should only
show
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concern
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 to the
inhabitants
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 of their own
country
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 and
community
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. I completely disagree with the
statement
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 for the following
reason
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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