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Government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects to develop the country

#government #money #science #education #subjects #country
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In order to improve the country, state bodies should allocate large amounts of funds to
science
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subjects
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 rather than art or literature. As far as I am concerned that, a large proportion of fund which invests
science
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 sector serves as an improvement of technology. In our contemporary era, society requires knowledge of
science
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subjects
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, as,
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 kind of education shapes fundamental knowledge about life realities.
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 of all, with the rapid development of recognition about
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 , not only society but
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 human consciousness has risen.
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, the discoveries of the twenty-
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 century rely on the
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 sector.
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, after many developed countries had recognized
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 as a compulsory subject, the number of inventions and creations have increased.
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, it is proved that
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 education enhances both mental and critical cognitive ability. In order to improve students overall education performance ,
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 can be a powerful tool at school. So more funds should invest to improve scientific knowledge. To learn
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subjects
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 like zoology and biology improves respect to nature. And
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 studying physics, develop children's inner desire in many fields
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 as invention and creation.
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,
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 became an inseparable part and parcel in our modern era. No one denies the importance of other
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. Because, without Humanitarians, our lives would have been colourless, mundane and boring. To sum up, the government should spend more money on the
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 ,namely biology, zoology, autonomy and physics, because the development of both society and the human mind is directly related to
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